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My Future |
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dfcwer New Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 2 |
Like the winds of yesterdays memory Will the frozen present be any different? Light that is too bright in the gallery of memory Reminds me of the great horror of the adopter The hellish flames of my past and present Will these flames too consume my future? Pain horror and sadness that I have yet to give consent i have little or no hope at all for this dark future Yet my heart has yet to give in to misery Is there a chance a part of me still remains? Should I embrace this new found light or turn it away? I ask my cold frozen heart or at least what remains I look to the vast starry night sky in hopes for an answer I choose and I must embrace this light of hope even if I don't have an answer This is fictional, please review it im here to improve [This message has been edited by dfcwer (12-07-2008 11:58 PM).] |
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shades_of_green New Member
since 2008-12-17
Posts 8 |
First of all, I think your imagery in the first stanza is brilliant! However, mechanically speaking, I think you should take another look at how the poem flows. |
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free soul New Member
since 2009-01-09
Posts 6between the sky and earth |
GREAT POEM..I FELT U HAVE WROTE EXACTLY ABOUT THE STATE OF MIND WHICH IM LIVING NW..SO NICE OF U..DO KEEP ON. |
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