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ronald might Junior Member
since 2008-06-05
Posts 19 |
i hear the bell ring calling me for dinner i hear the bell ring telling me to pray i hear the bell ring and i get up for school i hear the bell ring and i pack up and leave i hear the bells are ringing in harmony with the tears of broken dreams |
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ronald might Junior Member
since 2008-06-05
Posts 19 |
this words came to thought while i was singing a tune. some sort of inspiration from the stresses of exams got me to begin a poem..for a song i cant seem to continue away from "i hear the bells ring" |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
I think the idea of a life controlled by the regimented ringing of a bell has definite possibilities. Not sure about the last two lines as they stand though. |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
The ending could take this direction: a comment on the bell, the sound of bell, the reaction to bell -- something active, not passive. The first two stanzas are a good set up. Best, imbeaux  |
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ronald might Junior Member
since 2008-06-05
Posts 19 |
thats great advice!!! thanks  |
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