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Invitation to openess

RC Langill
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since 2008-03-09

Posts 104

0 posted 2008-04-19 02:38 PM

We've been asked not to cross-post, so I'm inviting people on this forum to visit Open Forum #42 and offer critical analysis on Ars Poetica, Version B. If there's a better way to handle this situation, feel free to let me know.

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

1 posted 2008-04-19 03:24 PM

A poem should not mean,
   but bee.
Wasp not,
It still must buzz and hover... Love the word play here and the hint
and otherwise irritate us,
Hang at the edge of earshot
and dive back at awkward moments...moment of life
When life has loaded our hands
and we can't easily swat it away.... truth

And while we may savor the sweetness
Accumulated from their collections,... while how we were annoyed by their passing
The true destination of their
Long, dusty journey through time
Is to make the world bloom....absolutely  wonderful

I think that this is a quite perfect poem.

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

2 posted 2008-04-19 04:05 PM

Actually RC, you can cross post here in CA. It would have been acceptable to post you poem here as well as in Open. This does apply only to CA and the Poetry Workshop though.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2008-04-19 04:08 PM

Thanks Pete, because I was confused all over again.

I was pretty sure it was allowed, and I'm glad--I like to post my stuff simultaneously sometimes for my friends out there in Open as well.

dwgpoet
Member

since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

4 posted 2008-04-20 01:11 AM

Thanks RC Langill and Seoulair.

The poem is ready for print.

I would leave the single word "moments"
When life has loaded

Asta.

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