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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Dearly beloved Pale skin clothed in white silk Something old, new, borrowed Black and blue We gather here today Before safe loses its meaning In the angles of broken Bones in the kitchen To celebrate The triumph of rabid power Over the meek The union Of skull and floor Fist and cheek Of man and wife On a side note, has anyone here been published recently? I'm thinking of sending some of my work out again. [This message has been edited by eminor_angel (03-28-2008 09:32 PM).] |
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A.Grace Junior Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 31 |
Dearly beloved Pale skin clothed in white silk Something old, new, borrowed Black and blue (I like it) We gather here today Before safe loses its meaning (I'm not too sure about this line, it' like it doesn't belong- at this moment I can't think of something better though- if I do I'll be back and let you know) In the angles of broken Bones the kitchen To celebrate The triumph of rabid power Over the meek The union Of skull and floor Fist and cheek (I really like this, and the rhyme between meek & cheek) Of man and wife I thought you did a good job on this. I like the way that you broke it up, yet how they led into each other. The promise vs. the reality. A. |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Almost perfect show of your feelings. I agree with A.Grace's comments. I do not agree that singleness is safe however. Bcuz fornication is not safe. eminor_angel this is an A+ work on your stlye and word choices. Send off everywhere until you are published. I myself, will always be a poetry student. copyright dwgpoet 2007 |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Thanks for your comments! I agree, being single isn't necessarily safer than being married, but the woman in the poem was definitely safer before this relationship. |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Yes she was, of course. We have a lot of newly registered poets. I am happy to see them, but to also read a since 2003 registered poet. keep it up, eminor_angel. Asta, |
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RC Langill Member
since 2008-03-09
Posts 104 |
quote: This transition is so concise, yet so well done that the two images unify instead of flashing back and forth in contrast |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Eminor_angel, What do you want to know about getting published? So far I've had sixty poems published in fifteen journals, and three book of poetry in ptint. Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (04-05-2008 12:15 PM).] |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Have you ever published in Canadian journals? What american journals did you get published in? Thanks |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I'm stuck with one simply thought: Why the hell is she marrying this guy? Answer that question and put it in the poem. |
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