LOVE an Action (Good) Word

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Critical Analysis #2

LOVE an Action (Good) Word

dwgpoet
Member

since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

0 posted 2008-04-10 01:21 AM

TEAM's creation why?
Father shares his joy of life:
wise creatures of love.

Team's taste buds balanced:
babies chuckle, as doves coo;
jasmines splash by streams.

TEAM's rains cool off hands
that slap penintent tokens,
dropped by aetheists.

Team's final ransom
gifts the key. Use it or lose
good news, eternal:

TEAM's chest of white robes,
adorned, snuggled bosom high,
eyewitness Eden.

copyright dwgpoet 2007

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2008-04-10 07:56 PM

quote:
TEAM's rains cool off hands
that slap penintent tokens,
dropped by aetheists.

I see an image of TEAM running around slapping tokens that have already hit the ground.

Funny but futile?

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