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Critical Analysis #2

Quirkiness

pachez77
Junior Member

since 2008-01-13

Posts 10
Florida USA

0 posted 2008-01-19 07:56 PM

Emily

Emily’s a little quirky,
Her mind can get a little murky.
Crinolines and velvet coats,
Dragons, castles and geese filled moats.
Top hat, evening gloves and cape,
Cause those green-eyed mouths to gape.
She is the sommelier of tea,
She’s made enough to fill the sea.
Her avatar reflects her thought,
Attired in weirdest finery bought.
Belle of the ball with no time to sit,
The other freaky queens should quit.

2/13/2006

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2008-01-19 09:04 PM

pachez,

I need you to e-mail me as soon as you can.

Also, please, please, don't post three poems in a row.

pachez77
Junior Member

since 2008-01-13

Posts 10
Florida USA

2 posted 2008-01-20 03:00 PM

Thank you. I was not aware of the 3 in a row thing. I will space out more.

>.>

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2008-01-21 11:21 PM

and I can't promise--but I'll try to space out less.

I love quirky poetry, so I had to hit this'n.

Kind of ditty-like, but I think if you're going for quirky, that should be assumed as okay.

I also like character portraits though, and I wish there was a little bit less sing-song and more depth and insight to her.

You could go for the quark that way.

Enjoyed.

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