Boy with a special pair of eyes

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Critical Analysis #2

Boy with a special pair of eyes

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-01-18 06:45 AM

Boy with a special pair of eyes
By the time you sixteen
You know there is
Something seriously
Gone wrong with me.

Throw me out?
No you cannot.
Motherhood is not what they say
Still, it is all you possess.

So you pray and pray.
A prayer for me:
So that I don’t often see
Floats of blue bubbles on the sky.
Or, the dragonfly,
Only friend of mine,
Do not disturb me at night
And entice me to fly.

Night is a time
I could fly:
Soft flakes of dark white
Around my eyes.
Your warm hands of morning
Always bring me down
Only to find, I have become a boy
Whom others call a blind.

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2008-01-18 03:15 PM

I still need an e-mail address.

To be fair, you may not understand how this forum works. It is imperative that you comment on other poems as well as respond to comments on your own poetry (there is no set rule of course), but pretty soon nobody will comment on your poetry.

There is, obviously, a 'tit-for-tat' thing to consider, but, more importantly, we need to know your goals, your thoughts, and what you think about poetry in general.

Four poems in a few days and nothing else isn't going to get you very far.

Send me an e-mail and we can talk.

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