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The Making of a Villanelle
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The Making of a Villanelle |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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wrote this for a friend of mine... The first line always goes right here You must choose well each clever word The third line's here - now, ain't that clear? The first lines now that will appear Rhyme with 1st stanza's first and third The first line always goes right here. All middle lines must rhyme, my dear, Although it may sound quite absurd The third line's here - now, ain't that clear? Five 3-line stanzas shall appear With rhymes in place as was inferred The first line always goes right here. One 4-line verse brings up the rear The proper style is now insured The third line's here - now, ain't that clear? So take it from the Balladeer Of villanelles you now have heard The first line always goes right here The third line's here - now, ain't that clear?  |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
Does your friend write good Villanelle after reading this? It is very clever.But I like your Dawn best. and why not write again something about your life?.  |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Balladeer! You're stuck on that eight syllable thing, which ain't too villanellish. Poke it up to ten, and you might hit the jackpot with "Do not go gentle in to that good night..." If you are going to do it, why screw with it? Best, Jim |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Balladeer, This is one of the reasons I admire your skill so much. I'm blown out of both shoes and both socks, standing here barefoot in the rain. Thank you, thank you, thank you. BobK. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You make it sound so easy.. I still can't do 'em. Eight syllables or ten--it's beyond me! Just popping in to voice my appreciation, and to let you know that this was saved long ago. On another comp though. (It was a few hurricanes and three robberies ago!)  Now I have it all fresh. thank you  |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
ah, it was for you dear SB. After I read this the other night. I tried to write one. I struggle for two hours, I got four line and could not make out which two would be for the last two verses. If you have to leave in midnight then leave at the night of full moon Brightened drakness rids your fright to follow the angelic tune. It is hard. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
No...I don't think it was for me. I just stole it for me. |
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