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Waiting for you
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Waiting for you |
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nevermore93 Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 73 |
Senses fail me while I await for your arrival I keep listening for the sound of your voice Its brilliant eloquence and comforting aura Yet, all I hear is the wind mocking my plight Senses fail me while I await for your arrival I look for you in the shadows of the moonlit night Its mystery haunts me, as does my memory of you Yet, all I see is the flicker of a candle dwindling Senses fail me while I await for your arrival I touch the picture of you from our time together The warmth of its touch, is as if I'm holding you Yet, all I feel is the cold of the winter night Senses fail me while I await for your arrival I detect the fragrance of lilacs in the air Its aroma fills me with thoughts about your beauty Yet, all I smell is the burning ash of the fire Senses fail me while I await for your arrival I can taste the joy radiating all over the place It reminds me of all the wondeful things we've done Yet, all I can taste is the bitterness of my tongue Now I admit that since I have lost touch with you I can't continue on. I have lost myself forever And now since my only request is to see you again Senses fail me while I await for your arrival |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
you know, i could have sworn that i posted in this before. in fact i'm 99% sure i did. i thought it was the most amazing thing i'd ever read . . . and posted a reply after i read the first stanza and then i found out the the rest of them only got better . . . you know elias, maybe i am losing my mind. lol. -Kate ps don't sweat it when people don't answer to you poems, they all get read, but not all have posts. there are many of my own post that have no replies. it's okay, but i find a lot of people will be looking at them on a later date if they find out that you are a poet that they like, and then they will usually post something up and it will bring on a wave of new replies and interest. so my advice is don't worry about it, just go with the flow and the good things will be discovered. "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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