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e-ReK Junior Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 15 |
HYPNOSIS close your eyes, take notice of the process that's begun. focus... and recognize the prospects that i hum. sentences strung, to the beat of the drum. relentless they come, your mind's feeble and numb. with power so great that even evil succumbs! my wordplay and puns are equal to none. no... there is no hope to come. my pen should be compared to a smoking gun! capable of any amount of attrocity: i watch as bombs will fly when i dot an "i" - or crucify you when i cross a "t"! ive slain monster metaphors and superhuman similes! and conjured and created microphone mephistopheles! because i promise that honestly... all of socrates' philosophies are not for me! i am the anomaly touching deeper than a homily! an alchemist creating more metals/medals than can ever honor me! so instead rally your army and ponder me. because the only battle is your wits against mine! ive got the missing piece that fits in your mind! make you hit play, then switch to rewind. search for the mystery, listen and find: i will morph and furthermore shift your design. do you feel your very wits swiftly unwind? -I DO- because at times, im so conservative when i rhyme, i go crazy; and i dont even finish the |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I liked some of the rhymes. Unfortunately, I found it difficult to accept, you reject a philosophy while taking a firm metaphysical stance and that does not come through in your form. |
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