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Essorant
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since 2002-08-10

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Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

0 posted 2007-02-27 02:18 PM

To be free
from one thing,
is to be bound
to another.

UseTheIllusion
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since 2006-02-06

Posts 223
In a state of limbo

1 posted 2007-02-27 03:20 PM

Not exactly what I would call a poem, but it rings true nonetheless.

Essorant
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since 2002-08-10

Posts 4769
Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

2 posted 2007-02-27 03:56 PM

Thanks.
Indeed it is a wordsaying, not a poem.
But I think the art of wise wordsayings is a close friend to Poesy.

UseTheIllusion
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since 2006-02-06

Posts 223
In a state of limbo

3 posted 2007-02-27 04:01 PM

It just occured to me that I jumped the gun just a little bit by assuming that everything in this forum is poetry. My bad. I realize now that your intent was not to write a poem. And I still think that what you wrote is very true.

Stupid me.

Stephanos

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since 2000-07-31

Posts 3618
Statesboro, GA, USA

4 posted 2007-02-27 07:24 PM

Essorant,

I think the correct word for this is an "epigram", which can be poetic. Also, if length were a requirement for poetry then haiku would be ruled out.

Stephen.

Ron

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-05-19

Posts 8669
Michigan, US

5 posted 2007-02-27 08:13 PM

Of course it's a poem.

LOL. It's called free verse, Essorant.

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

6 posted 2007-02-27 10:24 PM

How could one possibly critique this?

It is truth, but I don't understand why it was posted here in the critical analysis. What could any of us tell possibly you to fix?

I like it however, something that I'd expect to see on a notebook cover, and then I would desire to talk to the owner of said notebook.

-Paul

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2007-02-27 10:40 PM

smile

It's been awhile since I have been here, and I am smiling too.

Of course it is a poem.

And this one, oh how I know the truth of it.

I am the Queen of Substitution.

Ess? yer alright!

Ron

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-05-19

Posts 8669
Michigan, US

8 posted 2007-02-27 10:52 PM

quote:
It is truth, but I don't understand why it was posted here in the critical analysis. What could any of us tell possibly you to fix?

That's easy, too.

Show, don't tell.

Essorant
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since 2002-08-10

Posts 4769
Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

9 posted 2007-02-28 08:00 PM

Thanks all.

Please don't mind if I still just call it a saying.

If it were meant to be a fullfledged poem, however, I would have to argue about the idea of "show, don't tell". When I went to kindergarten I think I learnt a little better to show and tell.

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