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beautyincalvary Member
since 2006-07-13
Posts 98 |
normally an X will do it other times white-out but then sometimes there are things that nothing not even an eraser can fix. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Emily~ Good one~ I used to wonder why the pencil with all the mistakes in it had such a short eraser~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Good insight but it applies to much more than just a misspelled word. I have written more than a few pages that even the trash can couldn't fix  This is short, light and quite appropriate. I can't improve it. |
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Skippyrick Member
since 2006-05-16
Posts 150Rohnert Park |
hi: Short and sweet. I would love to see more of it. Say some medifore or an example of what may never be fixed, Maybe thats another poem altogther. Thanx rick |
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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
It needs more art and structure to be interesting; more craftiness. |
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beautyincalvary Member
since 2006-07-13
Posts 98 |
What do you mean by art and structure? |
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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
It is not easy to say (especially being tired and ready to go to bed right now  ). But think about the special quality and flow and form that comes in a limerick to say something short and witty, compared to your poem that has no rhyme and no special or consistent flow, but only linebreaks as a form-like structure for the poem. Don't be afraid to use the timber of tradition and that poetry is already built on from its past, that is what gives poetry its might and main, just like the special techniques learned in painting, in singing, and other arts. |
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Shaddow1 Junior Member
since 2006-09-04
Posts 41Kingman Az, USA |
Very insightfull. So short yet so powerful. I am not positive but i believe your are refering to life in general. We all make mistakes, but they can not alawys be undone. Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
wow.. you said a lot in such a short piece.. great job. ~heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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