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A few Haiku's of mine.

the concrete rose
Junior Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 33

0 posted 2006-08-01 09:27 PM

I'm working on a short book for my school this coming year, and here's a few of the Haiku's that will be in it. I call them the Current Chronicles.

Lebanon you cry
I shed tears watching TV
The sight is weary

On the desert fields,
Cars erupting everywhere
Fireworks from Hell..

Holiest of God
Conservative corrupted
With self principle

Hurricane comes now
The President does nothing
Corpses in water

The big Hurricane
Seen as the revenge of God
God without patience

The masses gather.
Revolution near it’s peak.
Rise your fist, and scream.

Your heart rates building.
The inevitable comes.
Time to wake up now.

He stands above us.
Looking down with his skull face
Just look up, and grin.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

1 posted 2006-08-02 10:40 PM

I like your haikus, concrete rose.

Well done.

artexeres
Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 156
south africa

2 posted 2006-08-03 11:16 AM

very good, i once heard a saying that reflects this to me/ do not reject, what you do not understand, for with understanding, comes acceptance.thank you for a thought provocer

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