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Critical Analysis #2

These feelings

Mika
New Member

since 2006-07-10

Posts 3

0 posted 2006-07-11 05:56 AM

Cannot stand still,
Cannot calm down,
Don't know how to tell,
sometimes life is just hell.

Smoking and drinking,
to get rid of this thinking,
drowning in selfpitty,
leaving the world on its own.

Cannot show these feelings
Cannot hide them,
An endless struggle,
And whoever wins,
I'll be the fool.

Skippyrick
Member

since 2006-05-16

Posts 150
Rohnert Park

1 posted 2006-07-11 07:27 PM

Hi:

sorry not real good poetry but I do wish you all the luck in the world

rick

Oreo22
New Member

since 2006-07-13

Posts 2

2 posted 2006-07-13 04:44 PM

i mean it wasn't the best but it could be a little better you know

loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

3 posted 2006-07-16 06:34 PM

contrary to what everyone else seems to think about it...i like how it shows the deep inner struggle that we face within our lives..."cannot show these feelings, cant hide them either"...definately know what u mean and i like how u express it...

The more people that I can make EXTREMELY uncomfortable, the better

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