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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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I think I’m healing over But after what I’ve been through I’m not really sure, But I don’t think I want to I think I’ve shown you That we could be I know you want that But what you don’t want is me I don’t understand But I guess that’s okay I’ll be fine without you I started healing today Though the scars might go, They’re gonna be deep I can tell you right now That promise I’ll keep I don’t want to heal over Even after all that pain Especially when I heard You don’t feel that way I’d rather keep the scars So I can prove to you That no matter what To you I’d stay true I don’t want to heal over I’ve been through so much I don’t want to forget That occasional touch That I’ve come to provoke The playful insult The occasional joke How I shy and blush Every time you come near That look in your eyes That I find so dear I don’t want to forget But it seems that I must I don’t want to forget Although you I trust Remember our friendship Though it became nothing more Has run the distance And will last forevermore |
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ChristianSpeaks Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 396Iowa, USA |
I like the idea and I like the idea that you can take an unassuming view of something bad. The thing that I don't quite understand is the varying use of rhyme. It was sorta like the last poem you posted..... it doesn't quite have the continuity that is needed. Keep swinging. CS An artist's job is not to commentate the truth. |
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