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WITHIN A STONE'S THROW

bivzbabe
New Member

since 2006-06-08

Posts 7
marion,il

0 posted 2006-06-08 05:04 PM

Within a Stone’s Throw

Lies a once lively garden
Within a stone’s throw,
Chipper chipmunks chase gaily
Over ground where weeds grow,
While the wild onion wind wakes
The molding windrow.

Tired tools of the harvest
In rusty sleep lie,
At the fence that kept cattle
In the meadow nearby,
While the gate gapes wide open
Having long said goodbye.

Under shade of sugar maple
Where the salvias grow,
Lie the farmer and family
Who, many years ago,
Raised the home barely standing
Within a stone’s throw.

Sherry Bivin 4/05

Khatharsis
Junior Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 42

1 posted 2006-06-09 01:13 AM

While the gate gapes wide open
Having long said goodbye.

The imagrey and msg was just so powerful in this couplet. I'm not much of a garden person or all that, but I can see this was very well thought out. Your standard poem with great vocab. A well written peice.

Jess
Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 243
Washington

2 posted 2006-06-09 01:13 PM

I love how you use your title as a recurring line throughout the poem

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