Critical Analysis #2 |
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themute Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 469Maryland |
A baby died when it was borne Her face was white and blue and always ignored Her eyes were squinting as if in pain She’s works on corners and has no name Her hair is blond and the roots are black She dies every morning when the sun comes back It’s the only thing that ever has for her She lives in the rooms that say please don’t disturb And one day she woke up to a man knocking on her door He said she no longer had to work anymore She was free from hell and free from nothing He touched her hand and she woke up crying The tears they fell like rain but her husband heard them falling And he kissed her on the lips and she cried there even harder She thought she lived a dream, but she’s just a baby martyr She was born into death and lived in sadness Oh what a melancholy gladness She had this in her soul The hell she lived was meant to compensate For the heaven she received But she didn’t realize that she was always really dead And she never really lived her life; it was always just a dream She died and was forgotten and then left there on the floor Why was she ever born? |
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kadafi09 Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 143California, United States |
This piece is deep. It makes me think of all those people just existing and never living. I really enjoyed the structure of the poem and the flow and cadence of it, I thought both were really adequate and added, never retracted, from the poem as a whole. great work overall and please do write more cause you're great. the sun setting over turlock, |
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