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Critical Analysis #2
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J@red
Junior Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 12
Alabama
0 posted 2006-04-28 09:58 PM

I'm a definite newcomer to poetry writing but been a fan for a long while. Feel free to say whatever you wish.
Say
Every single day
I will never sell out no how and no way.

Feel
But never kneel
To the circumstance of the real.

Touch
Sometimes too much
The revelries of drinking and such.

Know
And always show
Just where it is you want to go.

Superman isn't brave, he is invulnerable.
© Copyright 2006 Jared - All Rights Reserved
Skippyrick
Member
since 2006-05-16
Posts 150
Rohnert Park
1 posted 2006-06-06 12:15 PM

hi:

A nice poem. A little of a cliche.  And well honestly it seems that you really tried to make it rhyme.  as you know poems don't have to.

Thanks for sharign
rick
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