Critical Analysis #2 |
another piece by me |
Roberta Little Junior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 42beloit wi usa |
Falling from Grace by:Me She was a lonely girl, always by herself. Her eyes never glanced away from her notebook. No one ever paid her any notice, no one ever cared. She was played the fool and now wants revenge. A little twist of a fairy tale and she believes herself as God, The princess who had it all but lived in her mind. Now she stands as someone else, guarding herself with a faux face. Today is the day the princess lost it all, including her sanity. She reached for the ray of hope that was promised, But the world stole it away in a fit of laughter. So the little princess took the closest thing to hope; And she changed once again, but into an angel this time. Her dreams only lasted so long; for she remembered that only devils exist. So her wings and halo were replaced with horns and a tail. Never again did she change- only realize her mistakes. But now it was too late, the angel had fallen from heaven... For the very last time. GOD's greatist gift is LOVE |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I loved the end to this.. and where the whole poem led up to.. the poem in itself wasn't my favorite but maybe becasue it just wasn't my style (the setup) but different people have differnet opinion.. I feel like this is more than prose than a poem. but great job.. kinda confused me there for a minute but after that all was well.. Keep it up.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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Roberta Little Junior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 42beloit wi usa |
yea, most of my stuff ends up falling into the prose catagory, but i guess that's just because i don't do the whole rhyming thing. i'm glad you liked it though. GOD's greatist gift is LOVE |
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