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elpoeta
Junior Member

since 2006-01-17

Posts 15
Puerto Rico

0 posted 2006-01-17 07:24 PM

Depression Hurts

In my dreams…
I hear the whisper of death standing still
he slowly strangles the last of my will
I awake with a gray haze confusing my skull
Lackluster and black, everything dull
Continue on? No one tells me how
This demon within has taken a vow
To destroy my will to fight
To take away my sleep filled nights
Thoughts that run at incredible speed
Verbal assaults on those we most need
I sit still in a four dimensional world
Hope is lying dead, next to me
And to bring hope back
I need only take two Xanax.
Only through this cycle of medication
Will there ever exist vindication
For all my guilty sins
I don’t care at this point who wins
Zoloft fights the Clonopin
And the Clonopin fights the Doxepin
While both get together with Geodon
And turn my brain into fried eggs with ham
Making me lose all notion of who I am
This depression is causing so much pain
As the pills I take alter my brain
Although I find I still feel the same
Could hope be alive if I had taken cocaine?
So many thoughts lead to a panic attack
Oh no, I need another Xanax!
So that I can again feel relaxed
Do I really need doctors watching my back?
Why is something like panic attacking me?
My only dream was a dream to be free
And now I dream of things that can’t be
Like love and hope eluding me
Death and fear attacking me
Depression, slowly taking over me

Depression hurts.

gelato
Member

since 2005-10-27

Posts 63
TN,USA

1 posted 2006-01-18 11:54 AM

The expression comes through...one of deep depression. So does the idea of the person in the poem trying to "make it better" by using all sorts of pills...one to relax, etc.
I enjoyed the poem very much. : )

"Relationships are the one tangible connection we have with God" - Purpose Driven Life

LifeSinger
Junior Member

since 2006-01-15

Posts 25
Kentucky, USA

2 posted 2006-01-21 11:04 AM

You definately got your emotions through. but there is one thing i would change in the line
"Could hope be alive if i had taken cocaine"

i would change taken to done because cocaine is not generally "taken" like you would a pill. But this is a very emotional peice, and very good.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2006-01-21 02:08 PM

I have to agree if you remove the line with reference to cocaine, (as it is the odd man out) the poem works way better and packs a stronger punch without it. Nicely done.

elpoeta
Junior Member

since 2006-01-17

Posts 15
Puerto Rico

4 posted 2006-01-21 05:49 PM

Thank you very much for your comments. They are welcome and greatly appreciated. This was tough putting onto paper as I had to explore what was truly going on inside of me... and thus I came up with the fact that "Depression Hurts"!

I went to the woods because I wanted to live life deliberately...

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2006-01-21 11:41 PM

elpoetra

"Depression hurts." Yes, it does!!

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