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TreeFiddy
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0 posted 2005-12-05 11:28 PM


I originally posted this in Open Poetry, but I need some advice on how to improve. Thank you for any suggestions you give!

Cordless

Everyone now knows of the falling tower
The squires are running hungrily through the courtyard
In and out of the throne; each thinks he is king
- of the city -
celebrating the fall of a monumental symbol
pushing the birds into the sky
reshaping each castle.

Forms of white dash around the protesters
Trying to force the catalysts back into the town.
Yet even they don't know their way through the streets
as the bricks rise and fall into unfamiliar stairways and corners.
The uncalled force of the king, they keep these halls the same
Yet grow looser and looser
as the years go by.

Only the clowns sleep among the stones
Unaware of the events in the world of dust.
Lost in a bliss under the streetlight
As the bulb is pushed higher and higher
Into the future.

© Copyright 2005 Andrew Paschal - All Rights Reserved
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