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the opus of my fantasies
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the opus of my fantasies |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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While swimming in the open sea, I glanced about and chanced to see shimmering gold fins cruising casually in the depths just beneath me. I took note of this moment, immersed in spontaneous harmony. ~no predetermined clefs...no prearranged riffs~ As I scaled the layered spaces of our intermingled realities, we became a symphony of synchronicity, a resonance of the opus of my fantasies. * I would appreciate any feedback you care to offer on this...especially if I have used any musical terminology incorrectly. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
There are some neat lines here. I really like A resonance of the opus of my fantasies. By clefs, I think you may mean the key signature, ie Key of C or B flat..etc..and 3/4 or 4/4 timing on the rhythm. Nice write. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thanks Ken yes, that's the clefs I was referring to meaning, no 'obvious' signature attached to the moment |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
kayjay, clefs and key signatures and time signatures are three separate things, though the latter two are notated on one of the four clefs (treble, alto, tenor, and bass, as you probably know). Midnitesun, as a musician I was delighted to finally read a poem here with imagery such as this. Good job. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thank you for visiting this, eminor angel, and for your gracious reply! What kind of music? instruments, vocals? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Good grief now you know I can't critique, but I can tell you this - I absolute loved this, the image I saw, the string of thoughts suggested, and anything that is linked to music in my books is great! I loved this and saved it in your little reference directory Kacy. (Give Sara a squeeze too.) To see real beauty - look with your heart. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Gosh, thanks, Sharon! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kacy....stumbled onto this one. Now, I am really not a critic okay....but I think this is outstanding....your use of the musical language, I think, is great and I'm impressed. I wish you had posted this in open forum, though, because I almost missed it. I don't come here often. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Jo, glad you stumbled by here for a minute.  I thought I'd stick it in here first for a while, and see if someone would tell me if I'd made some serious booboo with my music terminology, if the imagery didn't hit the notes cleanly. I learned some sheet music reading for A capella choir in middle school, but don't have a good handle on the terms. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Well, from your comment, I think you meant key signatures instead of clefs, which is a different thing as EA referenced above. It works this way too though, just with a slightly different meaning. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thanks! though maybe this is a reminder for me to study music again, maybe take a class? I'm trying to teach myself basic guitar, can play several chords and have made up my own chord progressions. But I can't follow any sheet music, and don't really even know what key I'm playing in. LOL, maybe it doesn't matter since I'm not likely to hit the stage at my age.  |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
As far as guitar, there is an old saying among musicians: "How do you get a guitar player to play softly? ... Put a sheet of music in front of him." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
that is funny, I hadn't heard that one |
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Amen Junior Member
since 2005-09-13
Posts 28Brooklyn, New York |
darn...missed the music discussion... Great read. I dont see anything needing developing |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Amen, thank you, and welcome to Passions! |
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