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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248
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Around the fireplace long ago when I was a tiny tot my grandfather told a story that I have not forgot And I doubt I ever will, forget a tale so sad In fact, not a more sorrow one has yet, to me, been had "Her Eyes," He said, "Her eyes, I won't ever forget... So filled with tears and sorrow, overflowing with regret.. You see, I was the captain of the finest ship of the sea, She was a simple working girl and she was in love with me. I couldn't keep away from her She was such a sight to see. The seven wonders of the world Couldn't compare with her beauty. Her hips they swayed from side to side her eyes could captivate and every word from her lips made me sure of my soul mate Together we spent three long months 'til I was called to go To this day, where she is. I have not come to know. I loved her with all my might It happened so very fast But when I had to set sail... Well, here's what came to pass: She stood at the dock, clinging to my chest I will never, ever forget what was her last request She wanted me to stay but she knew I had to depart So she pulled off her necklace, the locket shaped like a heart. She placed it oh so carefully around my shaking neck. then pulled me closer to her holding me on that deck. I smiled at her once more time wiped the tear from her cheek I kissed her lips again real soft And asked her not to speak The last look she gave me showed me all I needed to know I shouldn't be leaving I shouldn't have to go. Her eyes etched themselves forever in my mind Then I boarded slowly Thinking the world unkind A lifetime's past since I last saw her standing on that deck.. A lifetime's past, and yet somehow, The locket's still 'round my neck" That's when he pulled the chain from under his shirt he looked at it quietly wiping away the dirt I stared at him closely And I'll never forget his eyes. Tears rolled down his cheeks As he remembered their goodbyes "Her eyes" He said one last time. "I knew I loved them so But somehow, for some reason I just let them go. So they'll haunt my dreams forever And never leave me be Cause I know I traded my soul mate for the blue-green sea" And around that fireplace Oh so long ago I saw my grandpa's weakest time And I'll never let that go. I cant believe how long i waited |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
Wow... that choked me up there towards the end. The part about the look in her eyes kinda hit a little too close to home, a powerful read. Thanks i enjoyed it very much. " How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
good write |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
a comment..is this is a fictional poem or a factual based? I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
totally fictional. sorry if that ruins the image, lol, but any stories that my actual grandfather would tell wouldn't get through the moderators, they're soo bad. haha _keryn I cant believe how long i waited |
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