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Untitled... Parasite

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2005-05-11 02:04 PM

I'm trapped, in a sea of weightless rubbage
in a place where all reality ceases to exist
Gravity fades as your limbs go numb.
Colors bleed and swirl together in a whirlpool of greens and reds and blues
and as they swirl faster, just black
Repulsive black, surrounds me filling my lungs and invading my mind
but i reject it, it's angry
Enraged at my nerver to exspell it, forced from it's host
vile parasite
Finally free, blackness fading slowly downed
and awaken to a world that's dead within itself

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
-Godsmack
"If who i am is what i have, and what i have is lost...then who am i?"
(I Ride The Short Bus) s

merlynh
Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 411
deer park, wa

1 posted 2005-05-24 05:45 PM

This is quite good. I like the idea you expressed being trapped in a sea of weightless rubbage (Though I didn’t find rubbage in my dictionary only rubbish) where all reality ceases to exist. Awakened to a world of dead within itself only confirms an enlightening condition of being and soul searching.

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

2 posted 2005-05-25 10:49 AM

tahnk you... i'll have to change that to rubbish... i must've missed that one LoL

"I don't know who or where i am
but i also can't see why
but if i didn't laugh alot
i'd probably always cry"
- Kaos

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