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Journal Of A Frozen Man
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Journal Of A Frozen Man |
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b.costen Member
since 2003-11-02
Posts 107ontario, CAN |
1st Entry: extremities beginning to redden and numb worried about falling asleep 2nd Entry: sharp wincing pain present while urinating any moisture freeze-cracks upon meeting the air fires take 2 hrs to build and blow out easily 3rd Entry: past the treeline now; rarely found wood must be brought along have considered urine as heat source but logistically flawed its becoming difficult to write 4th Entry: penis frozen black sat down and contemplated suicide for two hours didn’t have the strength and gun is jammed decided to move on Last Entry: this might be the last entry only three fingers left hand w/ feeling still stacy cut her leg and the dogs turned on her then ran not sure if they’re real or just some perverted vision of death, but i've been seeing large black birds perching on petrified trees afraid to try shooting at them because i'm pretty sure they’re not real and i don’t want to find out i've been seeing things New Entry: penis finally fell off and went stark mad tried shooting a bird but no effect either i'm a terrible shot or nothing’s there New Entry: unexpectedly found a dead animal corpse (one of the dogs? or maybe a jackrabbit—not sure) while floundering in the snow and was able to have one last fire only a few matches left out of wood completely New Entry: i believe i've contracted some form of disease from that dead animal what little feeling in my body i have left is devoted to mind ripping pain fell on a steel pike out of the ground can only limp about 2 miles a day now am positive of impending death New Entry: 2 men found me lying on the snow they say i'm lucky to be alive both ears are damaged tho and my tongue is not cooperating so they don’t think i can understand them have overheard some interesting conversations New Entry: tried to escape but made too much noise they must think i'm mad and a danger to myself so they’ve chained me up they let me write in my journal for a few minutes each day which is my favorite part of the afternoon |
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Red Dreams Member
since 2005-01-09
Posts 90massachusetts |
wow. (realizing that's not constructive criticism at all) wow. |
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longte Member
since 2005-04-06
Posts 199Australia |
Agree with the WOW But Is it a Poem? I'm Very new here but surely there is a difference between a poem and a short story spoken slowly Live It |
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