Critical Analysis #2 |
On the inside looking out |
Roberta Little Junior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 42beloit wi usa |
I Watch You by: Me I watch you As you watch me, I know you're thinking, "She's one of them, the different ones." Well, so what if i am? That doesn't mean you're better than me, That you should make fun of me, And look at me strangely. I am still human. I do still have feelings. Why take pleasure in my pain? Laugh at me, Til you make me cry? Why? Can't you be nice, Can't you be kind? Why hurt me soo? What makes it fun? Please tell me so I can know.... GOD's greatist gift is LOVE |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
very well written, a subject i can relate to. needs more depth, more description, though. |
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longte Member
since 2005-04-06
Posts 199Australia |
Im not sure that it does need more It leaves us to visualise why there is a diffence etc Imagination is there to be used Live It |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
other than fixing a typo near the end (soo) I am not sure how to approach this with a critique, as it is such a personal release of feelings, directed to a specific individual. No one should be made to feel s(he) is less than...any other being. |
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