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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams 
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Fly high little sparrow with the pretty blue eyes, as high as the sun that's set in the skies. Gracefully soar in your passionate way amongst beautiful clouds that watch over the day. You're free and you're wild, liberty's child. Then comes the winds... Fly little sparrow as fast as you can! Hurry and flee from the ravaging winds! Seek out shelter from thunder and rain. Hide from the storm that brings in the pain. Back to your cubby, back to your den... Never get caught in the stormclouds again... Rest in emptiness, Find comfort alone behind the cold bars safely at home. Rest little sparrow now in your cage, safe from the chaos of the storms violent rage. Sleep little sparrow. Dusk will come soon, then twinkles the stars, then glimmers the moon. |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
this one is a little long for me, but i enjoy reading it, maybe you will too. constructive critique welcome, and suggest a title , too, if you please. |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
Maybe you should call it "Little Sparrow." So, what's the point? Is it better to be free and endangered or safely in a cage? You seem to be trying to say both of these things. |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
while freedom will keep your feet off the ground, trials seem scarier when you are independant. the main message expressed in the poem is trancendance, not the implications of freedom, or domestication. times when one will stoop from the heights, and gladly take humble refuge in the sanctity of security. |
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