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b.costen Member
since 2003-11-02
Posts 107ontario, CAN |
i like your smile like an old girlfriend or something you should be shot smiling just so the whole world could see it on the news |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
short, and sweet! perfect. |
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cynicsRus Senior Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 591So Cal So Cool! |
>>you should be shot smiling just so the whole world could see it on the news<< >short, and sweet! perfect.[?]< You're kidding, right? Sid If you must carp: Carpe diem! |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
it suited my taste. |
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b.costen Member
since 2003-11-02
Posts 107ontario, CAN |
cynic, i assume you were attacking the fact that she found it sweet, not the shortness or quality of the poem? so what's it going to be then, eh? |
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cynicsRus Senior Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 591So Cal So Cool! |
quote: You assume much too hastily. Simple comments seeking clarity needn't be taken as an attack. Regarding the poem: It comes across as neither sweet nor perfect--just a bit weird. Apparently, the dual meaning was lost on the Dreamchild. Furthermore, the vague imagery in L2 conveys a sort of laziness at this point. "Short and sweet" is hardly a critique. Sid If you must carp: Carpe diem! |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
sums up my critique to a t. it is short. and i thought it was sweet. you may find it just weird, but i understand it in a different light, as will each of any individuals. i just offer my opinion, if that's ok... |
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cynicsRus Senior Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 591So Cal So Cool! |
Such "critiques" (and I use the term loosely here), offer nothing in the way of depth--which is what this forum was about, not so long ago. Critics, (again...loosely), such as yourself, offering the familiar, vague, innocuous "opinions" are helping shape this forum into just another average, general poetry web forum. Sid |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
It is short. In my opinion, too short. Obviously there is something that angered you to write this. Expand upon that feeling. Was this an ex? What did this person do to anger you? Why do you want this person to be seen suffering in front of the whole world? These are questions that are left hanging for me. P. J. Kotrch |
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