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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
softly,raindrops tap against my window the gentlest of lullabyes making me feel dimmer farther away a sky so dark even the luminious moon was drowned beneath it's sable coat of clouds with eyes to the heavens,i search through it's depth the trace of a smile playing on my lips for i have learned that after every raging storm a rainbow is sure to arise "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Sorrowfulangel, This is a very lovely poem! I have only a few minor corrections. I suggest only the slightest change of line structure for the appearance and assisting the reader. These are only my opinions and you have the ultimate decision as the writer. Take care and keep writing. quatro the gentlest of lullabyes making me feel dimmer further away a sky so dark even the luminious moon was drowned beneath it's sable coat of clouds with eyes to the heavens,I search through it's depths the trace of a smile playing on my lips for I have learned that after every raging storm a rainbow is sure to arise" |
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