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bye New Member
since 2004-05-02
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the door is banal, yet a scratched label draws you near, these white halls with this door, and its black label strain your eye "the cloakroom" the soft wooden staircase and vintage levels, the red velvet carpet stretching all around, passages so dark and full of willful moans, the clasp of vintage levels releasing vintage tones"the cloakroom" the door swings open, and a swift embrace, of the wonders within, undisturbed, gently haul you in place the sweet black keys, and that uncloaked hand melt your soul, so you join the legless crowd, and weep, weep as you become like the dancing ones, hung before you, with the swift embrace of the wonders within, undisturbed, you stay, forever. |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
although the poem worked in that structure, i didn't feel it was quite justified. Why choose that format? Other than, nice imageries... |
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bye New Member
since 2004-05-02
Posts 2 |
i dont understand what you mean |
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