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Even In His Youth New Member
since 2004-02-03
Posts 5 |
Ok this isn't a happy poem but not about suicide. More about deression and lonelyness, or however you may interpret it, Please post falws and comments about it, because it is personally one of my favourite poems I have written. The angels screaming for salvation They've not quite made it into heaven They still pray to the god that keeps them out Hands closed pointing to the sky begging to the one who can free their lives Cloud nine is as far as they travel The sun sets too early for them Shrouded in darkness for there eternity They cant see the light anymore The feeling breeds behind the eyes As soon as there gowns turn from Wonderful clean white to dirty black robes As they turn from angels to humans They are reminded of the past they shared With the one they called god Worshiping him when he gave us our disease Yet he was the one who gave life Although god is but a stranger So as we all pray in unison to the one Who gave us all life in his goodwill Yet when the time comes for us to pass Will he open up his gates, open up his arms Because that’s where we long to be Although our souls are too tainted Souls tainted with the blood of a thousand sins All the little things we forgot to say Every time we didn’t show what we couldn’t do I am one of these discarded angels Casted away because we don’t fit in But we fit in with each other |
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gourdmad Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 136Upper Ohio Valley |
there = a place, not here their = plural possessive |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
Did you ever see the "Porphecy" movies? This poem reminded me of those movies alot. I like those movies so the poem was a nice backdrop for them. If you haven't seen them, I suggest you do, christopher walken is the main guy. Anyway. You had one "falw" that I saw other than the one already pointed out. It wasn't even in the poem. Yeah, you know what i'm talking about. |
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