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Critical Analysis #2

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gourdmad
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since 2003-12-01

Posts 136
Upper Ohio Valley

0 posted 2004-01-05 11:56 AM

A blue jay shrieks, echoed in the distance
between the spice bushes a glimpse
of silent deer moving away
from the snap of twigs
as Shiva passes

Riding his bull, trident held high
unblinking eyes of the snake
gaze from his shoulder,
moves thru jasmine
soaked air

Crematory ashes gray His body
His topknot held erectly
overhead vultures
ride thermals
He emits

His mount stops, grazes soft grass
He alights amidst peak blooms
that carpet the clearing
moves to mossy log
where She waits

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

1 posted 2004-01-05 01:53 PM

I liked this...I thought stanza 4 was somewhat of a let down after the first 3 which were very strong.

ambrish
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 257
India

2 posted 2004-01-08 01:16 AM

lovely, the vivid picture you have depicted of Shiva.

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