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The Rape |
PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
The Rape Preyed upon her like, a Dog in heat Like,... A mammal attacked in the wild You, violated the sanctity of her home, Stole her from her child; And, left him all alone. As deaf ears fell on those Who heard her pleas for help, And, no one saw a thing: To some abandoned, vacant field Forced to go Exposed and Abused, for you to view How would you like it, if no one asked you? As you drew power, From the rise of your erection And, entered your Victim, without a right Because, of her fighting and screams: You blackened both her eyes, To silence Her whimpering to far, To be heard You shattered her Spirit, Like,... Broken Glass And, she never felt you- But, the dirt & gravel Beneath, her bare back She never felt you. Paralyzed, to a state of shock Beaten and left for dead To later be found walking a distant freeway Naked But, Alive She is still yet, ALIVE. (This poem is based on actual events.) (Let me know what you think) Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I thought you did an excellent job writing this, I did not know what to expect when opening it, but see you did a real professional job with it. You get the point across very well. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
As L.D. says, professional job. What a horrific thing to happen to anyone. You express the horror and terror well. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
In the point of view of someone who has been in that situation, there is too much hate and fear for us to know what follows, and nothing happens to matter after that. It was a long time ago, but thank you, you have given me hope. Your poetry always seems to do that for me. Hope, Alicia A. Renzelman |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
I Think "Rape" Is a poem Spendidly crafted attempt from You! BTW,that was an informal cinquain ") |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
PrincessPoet, This is very well writen about a difficult subject. I am often amazed by the level of cruelty people inflict upon each other. My wife is an ER nurse and she deals with this as well. Thank you for posting this. INclan |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
yes.. a horrific happening, so well expressed... mm.. I wish that everyone had kind souls, so that no human, could do unto another such vile insane acts, such as this.. such a shame, that there are even a few such sick, demented, shameless, cruel people, in this world, who would inflict this upon another being. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
woops, posted twice ... Lynne [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 04-22-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PrincessPoet~ The acts - defiling. The sheer strength to survive is what saved this woman's life. May our compassion flow for her healing. Any monster who attacks like this should be found and dealt with swiftly ... not sit on his laurels in an air conditioned cell. Thank you for sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mrobi3543 Junior Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 29Philadelphia, PA |
When things like this happen, it makes me sad to be alive...ashamed that people treat others like this. Thanks for writing it...it was good to read. |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Tough subject Princess,you handled it well. Justice swift and sure, rarely happens. Society is out to lunch on this. Jack |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
I'm sorry this had to happen to you. I know the pain you speak of very well. It is something I have lived with for 4 years now, and it is still hard to feel normal. I just let my story out in here not 2 months ago--I'm glad we both shared our rage in a circle of friends. --Jamie |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
You expressed this poem well, Princess. Though I am a male, I know exactly how this would feel, 'cause one of my female friends also experienced the same event you have described in your poem. I noticed the usage of capital letters in certain words within the poem. They are all used in the right places to emphasize the points you want to express. The last word 'ALIVE' is especially effective, since for a girl who underwent such tragic event, being alive would be more without dignity than being deceased... Sorrow is the starting point of happiness. Without sorrow, a man can never realize the true meaning of happiness. Jõmes |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi I'm sorry for posting a late reply. I was tunned by it as I can relate it a bit. It's a ghastly one. But gaining the strength to live again , putting behind everything, thats great. You made it lady. Live happily forever. 'Male monsters' must be killed and if I'm given a chance my first one should be a very close one. I hate to see him,hear him. A_L |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
I had forgotten reading this Princess and to continue....am amazed at the number of women even in this small circle here in the pub, who have endured this experience...agree with Marge's monster line entirely. Well worth a second read for the poem and the responses. Jack |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
THANK YOU ALL FOR yOUR TOUCHING COMMENTS Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
I agree with all the comments above,I can only add how stange it seems to me, that extreme experiences good and bad forces great art into expression. PP thats what this poem is, great art. Jon |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know how this feels, though not to that extent of violence, still know how it feels |
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