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an attempt at Tanka:)

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2000-04-04 10:17 PM

Fearless warrior in the dark

Guardian angel~
Bright half-baked crescent moon glows
Loyal pup wagging~
Follows whenever I go
I am not scared anymore!

any comments appreciated

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-04-04 10:43 PM

This is delightful, Kaile!

Denise

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member

since 2000-03-29

Posts 358
Illinois

2 posted 2000-04-05 12:22 PM

Your poem describes some of my nightly "escapades" so to speak. It's very simple,yet so full of description,great poem =)

swamp

And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

songwater
Junior Member

since 2000-04-02

Posts 32
Marietta,Ga.

3 posted 2000-04-05 11:02 AM

Very nice Kaile simple and pure.

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Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

4 posted 2000-04-05 11:20 AM

Kaile, Very nice, keep 'em commin'! Dennis :^)

Gene
Senior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

5 posted 2000-04-05 11:57 AM

Kaile,

This is a fine tanka. It's a very nice image of a moment with your best friend.
5-7-5-7-7 perfect.

~Gene

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

6 posted 2000-04-06 04:27 PM

This is great Kaile !

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

7 posted 2000-04-07 07:07 AM

I liked this also, great job.

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