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'Waiting to Awaken' |
Lily B Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 91Auburn, IN, US |
"Waiting to Awaken"I glide through my days as I did in childhood dreams: With arms at my sides and eyes wide yet unfocused, floating aimlessly over everyone's heads and wondering where I might land. Seldom did I feel a part of the bustle around me then, in those recurring night flights; as I feel detached now, too, in my grown-up world. I hold my breath as I hover, looking down upon my life and the people reaching into it. I sense the sorrow and yearning in my lover's questioning gaze as I float just beyond his grasp. I see urgency in the eyes of my children as they hold their hands out for mine, begging me to anchor. Yet, despite the claims upon my heart they each truly own, I cannot bring myself to come down from the safety of this lofty plane that I've created and floundered in for so long now. I'm not sure I remember how -- or if I ever knew, even in my little girl dreams. I think I simply waited to wake up. I think I'm doing it still. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
This is a wonderful poem of detachment. I think most creative people have this sense of being outside reality at times. You've done a brilliant job of coveying this. Oh Welcome to our merry band. There's all manner of life in here. Jon |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Detatchment is an escapism I have used myself. We must be careful the the silver cord does not break. Very well written and I can well relate to this. Sheila ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I also feel detached alot of the time. I wonder why this happens. It can be a wonderful feeling though. Your poem is one that I can relate to though I amnot grown with children yet. I relate to it from a younger persons point of view. Thank you for sharing this poem! Love and hugs, Lizzie |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Lily - excellent poem. I too can relate. Expressed very well. ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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Lily B Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 91Auburn, IN, US |
Thank you, all, for your kind words and welcome! I'm looking forward to getting to know you all...... Pray not for a lighter load but for a stronger back.... |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very well written and thought out I like this, welcome to Passions hope you enjoy it here as much as I think we all do. |
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J Joyner Junior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 14 |
Loved it. We all need to step outside ourselves and look around sometimes. |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Marvelous poem. I think it expresses the way alot of artists feel as mentioned by Jon. I guess we all just have to keep our 10 toes in the sand while our head is in the clouds =] it's a wonderful way to live =P Swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
A great poem...I thought it was just me who felt like this |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Lily, Wonderful poem. Welcome to the Pub--hope you'll stay and share some more. ~Gene |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great writing, Lily! Welcome to the Pub! Denise |
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