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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Sitting in the corner Of a dark room with a window to the world I look out and see myself Living aimlessly, crying, peeling down the cracked paint Of my deteriorating life I'm no longer inside myself I'm outside looking in At the life I'm missing It's not the way I want it What can I do I'm locked in this room This dark little room With only a small dusty window Which I scream out through To let me out of here But alas, the glass seems to be too thick. < !signature--> JOY [This message has been edited by JOY 14 (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very emotional poem. I can feel the inner turmoil. I am sure we can all relate to this at one time or another in our lives.Very well done, Joy! Denise |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Thanks Denise JOY |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This reminds me of being young..not being allowed out...I couldn't hear the kids playing because we had double paned glass.. it truly was too thick! Good one! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I have known these feelings before, very well expressed. May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Thank you much Poet deVine and Satiate! JOY |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Ain't life a struggle so now and then. (Look who's talking !) I liked your poem Joy. I could really "feel" what you wrote. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice extended metaphor, Joy... I like lots..  |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
To be outside and see life passing by Yes i know that feeling and it's reasons why A room full of people, but feel lonely inside Nothing there to hold or guide. Very nice work Helmut The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Thanks Munda, Nan, and Helmut! Your replies are appreciated. It's nice to know I am not alone in this feeling of isolation. JOY |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Definitely well done... |
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