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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Yonder the last twilight Shining in the sky, Clouds chase down the sun now, My throat is feeling dry. The clinking of a glass here, And there amongst the din, Of patrons happy voices, As I cooly settle in. The whiff of a robusto, Can be perceived from far, A few of the nubilities, Then scurry from the bar. The flame ignites the cuban seed, The afternoon's first draw, Is always welcome discourse, To the silence of the thaw. The barmaid knows my poison, She gets the glass of Jack, And places it before me, "Hey glad to see you're back" Stirring in the lemon, The ice spills o'er the top, The first sip's always hardest, Except for when to stop. Night burns down the ashes, The glasses now are four, More thirsty for communion, Now pouring through the door. Some faces now familiar, But I’ve yet to learn the names, They all greet each other, And embark upon their games. 'Just people' I think to myself, Like friends you've known before, But inasmuch as they're the same, They're different all the more. To my right there is a ghost, And to my left I hear it, So many voices from the past, And I drink down my spirits. Across the bar I give a glance, A fancy lass is there, She sips her drink and laughs a lot, Avoiding my brief stare. They're all so young It seems to me, But then there's no place else To be. Still… Thirsty |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks for reposting this here, LR! This reminds me of the show 'Cheers'. I loved that show! And this poem...great ending too, 'Still... Thirsty' ! Denise |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent slice of life..I could almost smell the smoky bar...hear the clink of glasses...is that CCR on the jukebox? Yes.. believe it is...Cheers! Bottoms up!  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Great poem Lost Rebel....tell me please WHERE do you find the Cuban cigars?  A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
This is GREAT! I missed it the first time. Great job. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I also missed this one the first time around, glad I caught it this time! Loved this. May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thanks for reposting it here. I missed this one too. Great poem. : ) |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
hehe..i feel like shouting "Norm"... great poem... |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Good poem! I'm too young to go in bars, though, but this seems like a pretty good "taste" of how it's like lol "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
lol@norm.... thanks for all the positive affirmation and replies.... this really isn't what it may seem though. i wrote it last summer while i was on the road working nearly around the clock and drinking while i wasn't working... but, that's another poem.... |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I think I've a different perception then the others who've read and posted to your poem... It made me think of lonely nights while I was drinking trying to find a way to let go of the past.. *smiles* Still good though.. MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Great poem...glad you reposted cuz I missed it first time around. Thanks! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
I agree. Glad I didn't miss it this time May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
where ya been Hawke? |
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