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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA 
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I know, I know! Haven't posted in a while and I'm probably a stranger again! Just letting you all know I haven't dissapeared or forgotten you, I've just been entirely too busy. Anyway, here's one I just wrote about my recent break-up (go figure)! I just needed to write this to let it go. Hope you all don't mind a little anger and frustration! --Jamie  I saw you before I saw you sleeping Dreaming of the times When you took me for granted I saw you before I saw you shiver Perspiring heavily Scared that you'd lost me I saw you before I saw you drink Shouting to your friends Words you thought I'd never hear I saw you before I saw you laugh Snickering at the truth You thought you'd kept from me I saw you before I saw you slip Looking for another lie So that you could keep us together I saw you after I saw your ignorance Knowing you had lost me forever And thinking that you'd feel okay I saw you after I saw your grief And you know what pal? You deserve every minute of it Lessons are learned in the game of love Through trial and regret So that someday all of us will see Our Soulmate when we've met by, Jamie Hartman 2000 --There...positive ending!  "You make it hard to breathe It's as if I'm suffocating And when you're next to me I can feel you're heart beat through my skin It makes me sad to think this could all be for nothing I wish there was a way A way for you to see inside me I've never felt this way About anyone or anything Tell me What do I have to do? To make you happy What do I have to do? To make you understand What do I have to do? To make you want me But if I can't make you want me, What do I have to do?" 'What do I have to do?'by Stabbing Westward |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Wonderful poem. Good to see you, Jamie. ~Gene |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Welcome back Jamie ! Here grab a stool....what would you like to drink ? Great poem you wrote there. One I can relate to very much. Thank you for posting it here.  Cheers ! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem, Jamie! Welcome back! You were missed! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
jamie-girl is back...outta site but never outta mind... i just love an "angry and frustrated " chick poem...great job...lets all pull up a stool and cry in our beers...rootbeer for Spyro  glad your posting again.take care jm ps LOVE the SW lyric signature...Im trying to stay out of the music store so as to not spend the grocery money(again)..LOL...but im thinking I gotta have that one...who needs the 5 basic food groups when you can have new TUNES...LOL...thanks again for the recomendation!! Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome back! This is a good one! Kick him out! You deserve better. |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Welcome back Jamie, I'd say you're entitled to anger and frustration! Really good poem. Sheila |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
THIS WAS A GREAT POEM! I AM GLAD YOU GOT OUT YOUR FUSTRATION AND ANGER. THIS WAS VERY WELL EXPRESSED AND I AM GLAD YOU SHARED IT WITH ALL OF US. ALL OF US GIRLS CAN RELATE TO THIS ONE IM SURE, AND GUYS! AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
this was a great poem it mae me think of my situation. i mostly like the last part "Lessons are learned in the game of love Through trial and regret So that someday all of us will see Our Soulmate when we've met" keep up the goo work an welcome back. i hope this poem serve its purpose an you have been able to let go. i know from experience that letting go isnt easy goo luck |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely done here...I can so relate! |
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