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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State 
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I have been trying my hand at limericks. I wrote the first and then corrected it to 3 feet and 2 feet lines as I was told was proper. You tell me. first version. There was an old man from the city, Who didn't want anyone's pity. He sang for his food, Was often quite rude. And named his old hound dog "Miss Kitty." Mow to have the first second and fifth line three feet and the third and fourth 2 feet, I have tried this. A man from the city. Wanted no one's pity. Sang for his food. Often quite rude. Called his dog Miss Kitty. That's the way I read the instructions, but when I look for examples of limericks they look more like the first rhyme. What am I doing wrong? Joyce |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh Joyce your first try is great, but... hehe limericks are tricky.  They are written in Anapestic Meter. That's a three-beat foot with two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed oneIt reads like: da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum-da-da-Dum Here's the link to the latest workshop on that: /pip/Forum22/HTML/000286.html And here some limericks I wrote in the past. Hope it all helps you to understand limericks better. Good luck! Looking forward to more!  On a Christmas t'was deep in the night All the reindeer had started to fight Santa got so upset He jumped nude out of bed And gave THEM all a terrible fright! It seems I am in one of those ruts And it feels like a kick in the guts I can not find a rhyme It takes all of my time These darn lim'ricks are driving me nuts! I cried out to Saint Patrick last night I can not get this darn meter right He looked at me a while Said to me with a smile "It was you who requested this blight" Just five lines that will rhyme you request In some meter you call anapest To write lim'ricks takes much Even more when you're Dutch But of course this will NOT get me stressed! My mouse jumps like a real acrobat Flying over my screen like a bat It behaved like a pup I got really fed up So I fed it to one of my cats Munda  [This message has been edited by Munda (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh thank you. that helps a lot. Joyce Here's a. another. There once WAS an old WOman,I HEARD, Who would TALK every DAY to her BIRD. And to GET him to SPEAK. She just TWISTed his BEAK. And she TAUGHT him a VERy bad WORD. Do I get an A for effort? Thanks, Joyce [This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Joyce: I liked the first version of your "old man" limerick the best. correct form or not! The last one was hilarious! "A" Betty Lou Hebert |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
limericks are some of my favorite reads. you did a great job on both of yours. i like the first version best though, because that's the style i am accustomed to reading. your third one in the reply is definately an "A". thanks for the great limericks. ~DreamChild~ |
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