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The Other Side of Morning

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

0 posted 2001-04-22 02:42 PM

the sky was not blue
it was just one vast teardrop
surrounding and drowning me in sadness

the sun was not bright and warming
it was an angry searing blast of retching reality

the wild flowers were not things of beauty
but things I deeply despised
with the jealousy of a heart gone mad

my pillow was not soft
just a cold hard rock
bashing me awake
to the truth
that you were gone
on a
harsh
ugly
morning

[This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-22-2001).]

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

1 posted 2001-04-22 02:53 PM

This is painful! I hope it is not written from a personal experience. If it is, please know that I am sypathizing.

Betty Lou Hebert

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-04-22 02:56 PM

So sad. May tomorrow be brighter. Joyce

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

3 posted 2001-04-22 03:40 PM

Betty and Joyce...this is just a fantasy drawn from feelings felt long, long ago. I was just expanding upon the darker side of a broken heart in hopes of writing a somewhat stirring poem.
Since your posts, I have edited it to read in the past tense, which I feel makes it even better.

I'm fine, thank you.*S*

Mike

[This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-22-2001).]

mistyrose
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 75
state of anxiety

4 posted 2001-04-22 11:37 PM

packratmike.....i feel your pain..who hasnt felt like this at somepoint in their life?
you described very common thoughts and feelings ... that most would be to ashamed to admit.(but in such a wonderful way)..thanks for your poems~~mistyrose

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

5 posted 2001-04-23 12:02 PM

mistyrose...thank you again for the kind remarks. I'm glad that I am capable of sharing these things through my writings.

Mike

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