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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2001-01-11 04:56 PM

Tell me about 'I miss you'
as time flits by. Hours are seconds that
keep calling me back - yanking
each skien of the fate I preordained.
Make-shift smiles hide me
even though the cracks betray me...
Belie my very intentions!
All I wanted was your happiness, but somehow that
centralized around my desires. I
kept telling myself it was meant to be, though
time has a way of proving you wrong.
Oh but no - no, now is not the
time for again, 'cause I'll just be me - again.
How can now be good, when 'was'...was perfect?
Even still, I look forward to this now-step
not looking back, lest I fall into then - again.

Gene
Senior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

1 posted 2001-01-11 07:49 PM

I like your acrostics. I tried it--only got two lines before I gave up.

Funny how there really isn't a "now" since there is no present, 'cos time always moves forward. We're in a state of continually becoming. That's why you can't go back, and since you can't go back, there really is no past (or it would be the present). Can you tell I'm a Philosopher? LOL

So look at it this way...

There is no present, there is no past.
But only the becoming of things at last.
The present is the future of the past,
And the future is those things at last.

---

Hoping to read more and to get to know your poems better.

~Gene

Romy
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

2 posted 2001-01-12 09:34 AM

I'm impressed by the thought provoking message you wrote into such a difficult format! Acrostic is not easy, yet you made it look effortless!

I especially liked this line;

"How can now be good, when 'was'...was perfect?"

So true!
Great Job, I really enjoyed pondering this one, it made me slow down and think awhile!

Wikket
Member

since 2000-01-29

Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA

3 posted 2001-01-12 12:28 PM

How powerful your message! I did like this piece, oh yes!!!

Grand...just Grand!! *CLAP* *CLAP*

~~Jamie

I mean the opposite of what I say. You've got it now? No, it's the other way. ~Bruce Bennett

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 2001-01-12 08:13 PM

Very well done, Nicole! Very nice!

Denise

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2001-01-13 08:45 PM

Satiate, I am smiling

I love your thoughts here, every line is thought provoking.....

Oh but no - no, now is not the
time for again, 'cause I'll just be me - again. How can now be good, when 'was'...was perfect?
Even still, I look forward to this now-step
not looking back, lest I fall into then - again.

Let's not fall into then again
yes let's not!

I really loved this btw

Maree

I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~

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