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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon 
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Serenity With the press of your lips upon my face, morning comes again. After you have risen, I roll over across tousled bed sheets. The warmth you leave behind comforts, making your absence bearable. 12/18/00 |
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shira Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 88Hamburg, PA |
The imagery in this is warm and comforting... just proves that a poem need not be long to affect you or get a feeling across. This was really nice. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was beautiful! I liked this very much!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Nice....of course I'm going have to admit that I had to look up the form, I like it! Adding to my list of forms to try. Here is a link if anyone else is interested. http://members.tripod.com/~Startag/AboutSijo.html "Come...dance with me, into my world of words." |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
this was warm and tender..very nice..got to look into Sijo...thanks woirdancer for the link...  the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
This was simply beautiful, and the warmth of the poem lingers too! [This message has been edited by Songbird (edited 12-20-2000).] |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Thanks for such a lovely introduction to a new form! I enjoyed and learned. Couldn't be better! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Thank you everyone Sijo is fun to work with, but beware, it is more difficult than it appears. It took me over 3 hours just to get the sylable count right. LOL! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
short and emotional..what a delightful form you have chosen to express such sentiments!! |
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