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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Breath On Ice Snow is falling again... slow, sensuous, floating lazily to earth beauty belies it’s frozen nature. Study of individuality crystals unique on window-pane exactly alike, yet never the same. Mind trips in reverse... layers of dusty time reel away examining, seeking understanding. Who the “i” happens to be collage of others ideas or imput? communion or collective? like the snow? Looking for the “i” hidden inside wondering, questioning...I, me, mine? tis poetic curse? or random glory? Never to be certain, seeking self writing of countless other’s stories laughing as today assumes they are mine. Mine indeed, when “i” escapes me when within...snow, ice beguile existence as one of so many. Individual...sure; yet only a part, a cog screaming at foot of melting snowman where does he end and snow begin? Snow is falling again... somewhere in the winter of mind beauty gift wrapped with frozen. Each individual building a whole ice crystals form sheet on window-pane exactly alike, ‘cept one has heartbeat. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
loved this, specailly the ending  Sometimes you have to let go and move on, But never let go of the memories. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Daniel~ What a unique piece. I was caught by the wonder of the snowflakes - as they touched upon your thoughts. 'Snow is falling again... somewhere in the winter of mind beauty gift wrapped with frozen. Each individual building a whole ice crystals form sheet on window-pane exactly alike, ‘cept one has heartbeat.' *Sighing deeply* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Daniel! Lovely! Denise |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Thank you dear ladies! can't tell you how important your comments are to my work...and me, me, me -lol Don't even know where this one came from... one of those when reread one doesn't recognize as one's own... ya know? bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Well if you don't claim it, I certainly will... That's some darn good writing there Mr. Bleed! Sometimes the ones that come from nowhere are the best. Like a friend of mine once said "That's great! What caused you to write that?" My answer "I don't know. I just started writing." Go figure! Peace! |
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