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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Unknown Foe The cold of steel, The sharp of blade. All the hate Yet betrayed. The shadow chill Behind our back. Cause some to smile While others laugh. A small treachery My mind appalls. My footsteps light Down every hall. Averted gaze, Blinded by light Who's shadow cast Out my sight. A shallow twist From one to me. Was it just? I think petty. Standards set I don't belong. What right have they To sing that song? Never knowing Heart nor mind Only seeing With eyes blind. Appalled and angered As you see Caused by ones Shameful deceit. © Copyright 2000 Kevin Lormand - All rights reserved. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kevin, You've penned a poem of betrayal here, I felt the sharp jabbing pains with each verse with your staccato beat. Peace! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Great work. This should be in Dark passions. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
This is dark but well written.......very chilling Jon |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
ahhh..deceit, betrayal, thy name is man..well done. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Very different and well written, although it leaves me wondering... what the heck is going on my friend(s) ?? |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, great job on this! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well this was great. Betrayal is awful and you expressed that perfectly.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Kevin, This poem is excellent and reflects very well the way you were feeling I'm glad you were able to release the tension some through this poem. To bad this person who judged you is so blind to the wonderful person you are. |
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