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epoet
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since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa

0 posted 2000-10-31 09:20 PM



Here I am
a lost soul
in this cruel world.

Wandering around
day to day
trying to avoid pain.

Everywhere I look
I see despair
my heart aches
with compassion.

Pity is taken
on me
by everyone I meet.

They think that I
don't deserve to be
wandering their streets.

I wander alone
no hope in sight
just waiting to see
if I'll survive the night.

To feel love
sorrow and joy
then I could say
that I am alive.

However, for me
tis the end
for my days have
been numbered my friend.

I long to hear
the mournful sighs
escaping my body
one last time.



P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love



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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-10-31 09:33 PM


Very sad poem, epoet.

Denise

pegasus111
Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
2 posted 2000-11-01 08:48 AM


yes, very sad indeed..but, well written..may I suggest a change in color to make it easier to read?

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


kid D
Member
since 2000-10-18
Posts 64

3 posted 2000-11-01 09:11 AM


its sad but so true, we live our busy lives and look past the homeless...but they are people too...and sadly for most death means freedom...nice write    

i read this this morning and remembered to write what my mind almost wanted me to forget....

will put it here if that's ok, cause your words helped it to be  

paycheck compensation

on the steps
spattered blood
crimson evidence of  
last night's pain

respect walked around
instead of on

late for work tried
not to think
of the steps where
someone sat and bled
someone sat and cried



[This message has been edited by kid D (edited 11-01-2000).]

bestgirl911
Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551
Clio, MI , United We Stand
4 posted 2000-11-01 01:57 PM


This is very sad....as they are people like you and me with hearts and minds...and love.

Best

BloomingRose
Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092
Florida
5 posted 2000-11-01 04:31 PM


epoet~ This is sad, but a well written poem that exposes the truth of life on the streets.
Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

6 posted 2000-11-02 04:19 AM


Sad yeah.........but sadness in a strange way strengthens the soul makes it whole.


Jon

epoet
Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
7 posted 2000-11-02 08:06 PM


thank you one and all for the comments.  I was feeling a little depressed when I wrote this so I apologize for the sadness of it.  I originally intended this one to be a little more up.  It was supposed to be a poem about whats' wrong in society today, but I like the turn it took and where I ended up.  

P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love



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