ERROR: Page has Moved! (my first Haiku)

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Lady Lost
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since 2000-07-13

Posts 470

0 posted 2000-10-10 09:59 AM

I was inspired today while surfing the web and finding so many Page Has Moved Errors..argh! Nevertheless, it has inspired this Haiku (aren't you so proud, Mom?)

You step in the stream,
but the water has moved on.
That page is not here.

Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

1 posted 2000-10-10 02:20 PM

Beth,
Welcome to the delightful world of haiku/senryu! I love your first one, a sense of playfulness in spite of the agravation!
Write on!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2000-10-10 05:18 PM

Delightful and all too true...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

3 posted 2000-10-10 07:15 PM

Yes, my Beth, I am soooo proud! Great job and i love the humor, you're sunk now, cause you caught the Haiku bug, Now you'll be writing them left and right,oh, I'm sorry that page has moved....Love, Mom

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2000-10-10 08:07 PM

Beth-
   very cute...i like this alot.
   mom's right...once you've caught
   the bug, there's no turning back.

   -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

kcsgrandma
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

5 posted 2000-10-11 12:35 PM

Updated philosophy, from you can never step in the same river twice to you can never visit the same web site twice? Very charming.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

6 posted 2000-10-12 01:09 AM

very cute ..frustrated little ditty

hugs, dg

she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without
-clint black

Jon Mewett
Senior Member

since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

7 posted 2000-10-13 04:51 AM

Very very cute.......great..........

Damn Computers....

Jon

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2000-10-14 01:31 PM

WELCOME budding haikuist!!

enjoyed your first attempt and am eagerly waiting for more...you may turn out to be as great a haiku writer as your mother!!!

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