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Moon Dust

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Skelmersdale, UK

0 posted 2000-10-01 08:24 PM

Perfect cresent shape,
Fading in a starry mist,
Stand down to new moon.

There are enough colours in the world,
To paint your own dreams,
You won't get them,
Till you try.

Denise

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1 posted 2000-10-01 08:44 PM

Very beautiful, Maria!

Denise

Moon Dust

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Skelmersdale, UK

2 posted 2000-10-01 08:57 PM

thank u Denise

There are enough colours in the world,
To paint your own dreams,
You won't get them,
Till you try.

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

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King of Prussia, PA USA

3 posted 2000-10-01 09:15 PM

Lovely, Maria, and very luminous!

Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28

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on the roof again

4 posted 2000-10-01 09:45 PM

Oooo! what a beautiful haiku. i love that last line. Thanks for postin this!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2000-10-01 10:51 PM

Maria~
That gorgeous moon just smiles at your lovely phrases.
Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

6 posted 2000-10-01 11:56 PM

I rather like the second line, myself.

In any case, well done.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Jon Mewett
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7 posted 2000-10-02 03:08 PM

Moonlight becomes you Maria....more

jon

Moon Dust

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Skelmersdale, UK

8 posted 2000-10-02 03:36 PM

Thanks you guys

Ethan - And thank you for reading

There are enough colours in the world,
To paint your own dreams,
You won't get them,
Till you try.

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

9 posted 2000-10-03 11:31 AM

Loved it Maria.. especially because of my love of the moon and it's phases
~~smiles
Maureen

Chanson
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10 posted 2000-10-04 02:13 AM

Very pretty, Maria

...chanson~

Music, tonal clear & pure,
Caresses the harshest of curves.
-me, Song of Gesture

Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

11 posted 2000-10-04 03:50 PM

Thanks guys

There are enough colours in the world,
To paint your own dreams,
You won't get them,
Till you try.

Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17

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Michigan, U.S.A.

12 posted 2000-10-09 07:37 PM

Maria,
I like this moon haiku, a celestial delight!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

CitiZen-One
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New Mexico

13 posted 2000-10-10 04:45 PM

Powerful, Crisp. The way you wrote this, I was hung on each word. Each word lasted for an eternity, stuck on them, wanting to move to the next word, but trapped by the perfect unity of each individual word.

Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

14 posted 2000-10-10 07:07 PM

Dennis - Cheers love

Citizen-One - Glad to please, thank u

Sometimes you have to let go and move on,
But never let go of the memories.

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