Let it fall..(Brian's challenge)

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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-07-18 06:13 PM

One more anti hero worship
from the depths
of some enigmatic fool
that left the suburbs
for the open fields
of post modern flight from hell.
No, not from the quakes
or the rumblings of racism
that stench we all tend
to want to get rid of,
but the fact that there
were just too many things wrong.
So off I went to the last
journey of my youth,
through the pubs and alleys
of Los Angeles that served
many nights of reckless talk
and the establishment be damned.
There goes Happy house, Scream
and all those open up at 10 pm
party houses, where you paid 5 bucks
to drink your self to life,
and walk out saturday morning at 6am
like the kind demons we were.
And dance the pain that we had
kept for the week
and wonder what 30 would be like
and if the Virgin Prunes
were right about
"If I die I die".
But then, that love in your soul
the one that makes you write
and poor out those false indignanty's
that carress your heart and mind
for after all we've been through
stars have there moments and then they die.

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

1 posted 2000-07-18 06:43 PM

Michael G, a stunning poem and what a unique verse. Excellently written thanks for taking up the challenge.< !signature-->

the plot of our life sweats in the dark like a face the mystery of childbirth, of childhood itself grave visitations
what is it that calls to us?" patti smith

[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-18-2000).]

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

2 posted 2000-07-19 07:18 AM

U tell a story and then the conclusion comes it...Michael, I like this! *S*

love, michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Lady Lost
Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 470

3 posted 2000-07-19 08:39 AM

Talk about a poem a person can relate too..sadly, I have done the "Walk of Shame" many times out of that same house...I have danced with same demons. Writing has helped me survive...awesome poem.

You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-07-21 03:26 PM

And dance the pain that we had
kept for the week
and wonder what 30 would be like
and if the Virgin Prunes
were right about
"If I die I die".
But then, that love in your soul
the one that makes you write
and poor out those false indignanty's
that carress your heart and mind
for after all we've been through
stars have there moments and then they die.

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amazing...
and that last line just kicked poetic butt my friend...
awesome...
jm

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

5 posted 2000-07-25 04:36 AM

powerful intense read...thanx for sharing

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