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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. 
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Sweet Nature surrounds us, Need more time to devote, It's seasons astound us, Where's the big screen remote? HER Spring arrives in full bloom, upon the windowsill, just for us, love birds sing, let's bask in the beauty of dawn's melody but, honey, I'd prefer you buy me a diamond ring HIM Spring revives hopes, aspirations, NBA playoffs do mightily excite, Following the high-point leaders, And the Championship game's a delight! HER Crimson sun shines with all it's glory picnics in the park, we get lost in a summer song ice cream becomes our solace from the heat but, I refuse to be seen in public, if you wear that leopard print thong! HIM Summers welcome heat wave, Baseball battles do wage, The race is for the Pennant, Sports Heros on the front page! HER Autumn breezes in painting a bouquet of rainbows upon the oak trees setting ablaze our love for each other but, you'll be sleeping on the couch,if you don't rake those leaves HIM Autumns colors are Spectacular Like the Jerseys of Football teams , All mixed up on the line of scrimmage, Persuing Super Bowl Dreams! HER Winter snow glistens capturing the sparkle in your eyes Christmas is a magical time of year so, my dear, buy me a mink coat, and I'll pretend to be surprised HIM Winter's a majestic splendor, Sparkling fresh Zamboni ice, Hockey season at full throttle, Stanley Cup doth entice! What ever the season, We're the perfect couple, of course! He'll never know the reason, I'm stunned, She wants a Divorce??? [This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 07-11-2000).] |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Perfect summary of misunderstandings between a man and a woman. So many would be able to relate to this, but I can't yet. --Chibi |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
gosh, a poem penned by both of my fellow Haikuists..goody goody!!  a couple that is intimate in distance but not in heart...ditto Chibi's comments...this is realistically accurate poem that most of us can relate to and you both put this message through with such wit and humour! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Hey you guys is this hilariously witty and clever or what? Great job. I enjoyed this so much! Also a sad commentary on what most marriages are like. So many living in "quiet desperation". You both did a terrific job of seeing the funny side and making it into a hilarious poetic delight! Ellie |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Melissa and Dennis, this is a wonderfully written. Very clever twist Loved this poem. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
I just loved this ..great job you guyz !!!! |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
A Wonderful soap opera Type treat that you two have cooked up and served. It could well be titled: So Near Yet so Far Away! And to some degree, there is a sad basis for it's existence in many marriages. Sprinkled with humor-the absurdity of it all comes ringing out clearly--Great collaborative effort, Mellisa &nd Dennis. David |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Not experienced in love...but I relished this piece thoroughly! A lil touch of humour in the end was it? I love it! *S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you everyone for your great replies! It was fun working with Dennis on this poem Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
I also want to thank you for your kind responses. It was a real pleasure teaming up with Melissa to write this, her talent shines! Dennis :^) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Dennis and Melissa, I would say that BOTH of you shine in this one. . . a wonderful poem. . . made me smile. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa and Dennis~ A most delightful teamwork. ~*Marge*~ |
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