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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN 
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As cold as ice hard as a rock. Blade like a knife stabbed into my heart. blood pouring out Making a mess. maybe when im dead my heart can rest. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
That's a very powerful and emotioanl poem you wrote there. You say a lot with very few words. Well done ! Welcome to Passions  |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
To the point and definately painting a rich portrait of emotion and longing. Bravo and Welcome!!!!  "...at night I cling to you I'm so afraid; afraid the day will come and I'll wake up and find you gone. But you promise that you'd not abandon me and kissed my fears away but I woke up to that day..." 'Waking up Beside You' by Stabbing Westward |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I love short poems like this that have such a powerful message hidden in so few words! Joy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Short but says so much. Well done! Denise |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Hey Just, -- I like a good dark poem once in a while. This one says about all you need to say. Pretty sary, though. I hope you don't really feel this way. Na, you can't, you're too concerned about making a mess.  ~Gene |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
WoW, you have said so much in these few words! It is sad sometimes how we think that it takes something such as death to end the suffering and everything else in our hearts, when in reality it really doesnt! This is a great poem, and I can honestly say I have felt the same way myself! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Boy, I hope he read this one, cause it sure gets the point across in a hurry. Well done! Liz |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
THANKS FOR REPLYING EVERYONE. IT MEANS A LOT AND IM GLAD YOU GUYZ LIKED MY POEM. AT NO POINT WOULD I EVER TAKE MY OWN LIFE FOR A GUY BUT IT SEEMS LIKE THATS THE EASIEST AND BEST WAY OUT SOMETIME. (HIS LOVE REALLY IS LIKE THAT) N E WAY THANK YOU ALL |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i have a soft spot for short poems and i think you have done well with this one...  |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
My goodness! This is certainly not what I expected from the title! It is very powerful, though. I also admire people who can say a lot in a few words. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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